Pyxidis.fr, faites parler vos passions !

yeah... vudu will happen tonight if you pull this story!!
I am so kidding i dont even know how to do vudu!

vudu is a martial arts move.all you do is stick your hands in the air,wiggle your fingers and say "vudu!" lol

no no,
vudu is where you make a doll that looks like a person that you want to hurt and you do to the doll what you would do to the person.
i know what it is i just dont know how to do it.
nice try though!!!

lol i was tryin to be funny

i know!! that is whyi said nice try!!1
i was laughing!

i am appalled....i found this *points to screen* on the second page already!!!
i am beside myself... O.o

So...i am still putting up the threat of pulling this story for now...if u dont relly like it- just tell me...


so if u want::::: here is the nxt chap...




Victoria:

That was the most tedious dinner I have had in my life. Susan and Lucy weren’t too fond of me, but I didn’t even care. I was only truly attracted to Peter- although he was socializing with Edmund the whole time. Things quickened in pace while dancing. We shared the first song and danced alone in the middle of the room. I was thrilled to see Elizabeth standing to the side- watching our every move with a visage that looked as if she had eaten something acidic. When the music started, I decided to reveal my charming side. I was normally ruthless, and vile. Some even consider me brutal, having a heart of stone. It is only essential to get around in the world. I had a gift to charm people and blind them into thinking that I was a pleasant person. I especially knew what men wanted. That is why the dress I chose has a low cut neckline and clingy fabric that hugs your curves. Peter seemed to be enjoying me as his dance partner. I felt him starting to warm up to me. He was the type who was looking for a girl that was kind, polite, gentle, comical and inner beauty. He was also attracted to outer beauty like every man was; it didn’t make them any less dire. So with that, I was pretending to be genuine, polite and slightly comical. While inside my mind, I was screaming ay myself for being so sickeningly sweet. I hated it!!!

After dancing through five songs straight, Peter excused himself and left me alone. I saw him run through the mass of dancers and meet up with a girl in a dust rose dress. When she turned around, my jaw dropped considerably and I felt like hitting myself inside. The screaming racking through my brain got louder. Oh! It was that little twit of a servant girl!!


Peter:

She looked gorgeous in dusty rose. It made her face look alive, giving her cheeks a natural pink pigment. She smiled up at me and took my hand. I pulled her in close to me. Closer than we were on the balcony. Our breath mingled closely as I rested my hand on her hip. She rested her head lightly on my shoulder and once again, her delicate hand slipped perfectly into mine. I felt my skin tingle in delight as we danced to the upbeat music. I wanted to keep her safe away from evil clutches; I wanted her to be mine.

“You look like a nymph.” I proclaimed shyly.

She lowered her head from obviously feeling embarrassed from my comment. “Thank-you Peter. You look like a powerful god.” I could see her smile inside of herself. I had made her feel loved when no one could.

“Hey, why don’t we go to our special spot?”

“The balcony? Sure, it sounds tranquil already.” She took my hand and led me to the balcony- pushing past the silk curtains to get through. She let go and walked towards the marble railing. She looked up, facing the miraculous sea of stars – the moon magically outlining her small frame against the dark void that we call night.

“What do you think of Princess Victoria” she said coldly and obviously hurt.

“She is attractive, kind and friendly” I said not lying or feared of being a coward. She still looked upward towards heaven, her faced faltered. “But that doesn’t matter Lizbeth, I don’t care about her.” She turned her face to me and I saw that she had been crying silently since she had started the conversation. I stepped in closer to her and gently wiped the tears from here eyes.

“How do I know that you are telling the truth Peter?” I cupped her face in my hands and pulled her face up to mine. “Because, I will never love her, someone has taken my heart and won’t let me go free.” I meant it and she knew who I was talking about. As she looked into my eyes- lost in thought, she smiled a loving smile. My heart just wanted to fly right out of my chest.

Elizabeth:

He had called me Lizbeth. That was what my father used to call me. It brought back a wave of memories but, it felt right coming from Peter’s mouth, just as it did when my father said it. I was scared to show Peter my emotions because I had though he would like Victoria better. I just felt sad, jealousy and love at the same time. A strange combination. I refused to see him; instead he came closer and lifted up my chin to his face. He gently wiped the tears from my eyes as I gazed into his loving eyes. “Because, I will never love her, someone has taken my heart and won’t let me go free” he said softly. He was referring to me- this meant that he loves me and not Victoria. All I could do was smile but, I was really beaming inside. All of my fears vanished. I knew Peter would keep me safe from harm. With his thumb that had wiped my tears, it was now caressing my cheek. I closed my eyes, relishing the moment. I could feel his body step even closer to mine. He held my face in his hands. I could feel his warm breath on my tender lips. He leaned in until our noses were touching slightly. Our lips barely touched before the curtains were flung open- light streaming in.

“Oh, was I interrupting something here?” I heard the voice snicker. We both turned to face Victoria with a fake sweet smile plastered on her face.

Peter looked at her and responded “uh….no.”

“Well, in that case, would you be so kind as to share the next dance with me??” She smiled but it didn’t come out right. It looked twisted and hurtful. I knew that her muscles were made to frown rather than smile.

Before they vanished into the reality of the dance floor, he mouthed ‘Courtyard’ sympathetically. I nodded in agreement and once again, I was alone. My heart beat frantically; I thought it would definitely fly out of my chest this time.

I decided to go back to the dance floor. I forced a small smile seeing Peter dance with Victoria. I was happier and more optimistic about the rest of tonight. I spotted Gena, Edmund, Susan and Lucy leaning against a wall, talking amongst themselves.

“Are you okay, Liz because awhile ago, you had a puss on your face?” Gena said jokingly.

I smiled. “Yeah, I feel much better now, thanks for feeling so concerned about my well-being.” We all decided to dance in a circle where we were standing.

“Ed, what do you think of Victoria???” I asked.

“She seems nice and she is beautiful but, something seems out of place.”

“Well, I think she is ghastly and conniving.”

“You think that because she is flirting with Peter!”

“Not So!!!!!”

“Try me” Edmund declared. I couldn’t fight what I felt in my heart. Edmund could force the truth out of anyone- even if it meant making them look like a fool. If you lied, he would simply say that he was one himself and change the subject. I just smiled in rely of his statement in spite of myself.

“Gena, tomorrow, Peter and I are going to the practice fields. Would you and Elizabeth care to join?”

“Sounds good, Ed. Thanks for inviting us.” Gena said.

The song ended. I offered Lucy the chance to dance with me. She excitedly accepted, frolicking all over the place- leading me towards the dance floor. “Your going to have to do the boys part though” she said with a giggle. She threw her hands into mine. The moment we started, I was already messing up the confusing steps. She was laughing uncontrollably at my dilemma. So, I decided to twirl her to the point she got dizzy. Bad Idea. She kept begging me to twirl her more and more. I thought I was going to be sick. Susan was laughing her head off- her face turning tomato red. The song ended- unfortunately it was the last song so I said goodnight to everyone and went my separate way. I silently snuck off to the courtyard, hoping the outcome would be good.


is it a keeper??


Edité par will4ever le 08/06/2006 à 21:36

it's a keeper!

it's a keeper alright!
surely is!

yes deff a keeper!

ok then....

should i update soon then??

ohhhhh yeah!!!!!!!!!!!


deff i am anxious!
one thing i would suggest is that you spread out the description of the dresses or whatever more. Like you could have one of the characters compliment on it or whatnot. just kinda when you put al he description together it makes it sound runny. no offense, just trying to help a little. you did good with that when you had Susan compliment on that one girls dress that Susan let her wear. I have forgotten her name now!

ok thnx for the critisism..i will take tht into consideration nxt time!!

its ok...we all stml some time or another...

fine..ill update now!

THIS CHAPTER IS PG-14..IF U ARENT 14...THEN DONT RD IT...




Peter:
Victoria was an attractive young woman but, I couldn’t love her when someone else already has my heart and she knows it. The moment on the balcony was the only thing on my mind. I should’ve given Victoria the attention that a princess like herself deserves, but I felt distant- and she knew it too. Out of remorse, I reluctantly invited her to come to the practice fields with Edmund and I tomorrow. She accepted my offer enthusiastically. When the last song ended, I quickly said hasty good-byes to the guests. I had to hurriedly get to my Lizbeth. I hoped that everything was going to go well in the courtyard- without interruptions.

I silently snuck out of the dance floor. When I had arrived at the courtyard, she was already there, sitting on a marble bench, gazing up at the vast sea of stars. She had let her hair loose, which had now hung into wavy spirals. They draped over her shoulders perfectly. Her gentle hands were folded in her lap neatly and sitting up with such poise, yet I could tell she was anxious to see me. The moon shone onto her face, her eyes lit up in a magical way. I thought to myself that she looked like an ethereal goddess, and I her god.

“Do you enjoy star gazing?”

“Indeed, I do. I think it is magical. Would you like to go for a walk?”

“Yes, I would enjoy doing so.” We walked in silence until we reached a fountain surrounded by a variety of flowers that gleamed in the moonlight. In the middle of the fountain was a mermaid; her gaze locked on the stars above. Water flowed out of her mouth- ebbing into the basin below. She walked around the edge of the fountain, holding my and delicately. When she had walked around the perimeter once, she leaped into my arms. I held her there for a few moments then, let her down; never letting go of her. I pulled her close to me; nothing could break me away from her, not even death. Her hands slid up my chest and found their way holding on to the back of my neck. I leaned down to her; her back arched with my movement. We were at the point of no return. Our mouths met and my tender lips pressed hers. A tingling sensation traveled through my body. Her lips were soft and warm, we both closed our eyes; relishing the moment lost in our passionate kiss.

Elizabeth:

Instead of letting go, he pulled me closer to him my eyes never leaving his. I wrapped my arms around his neck as he continued to hold me close. As he leaned in closer, my back automatically arched in response. His face lowered down to mine. His lips touched me softly at first then with more pressure. His hand held the side of my face as he exerted more pressure on my lips. His other hand was idle on my waist. It was passionate kissing under the stars. I was enveloped by a feeling of joy and love. The temperature started to dramatically drop.

“Follow me” was all he said.

He grabbed my hand and led me to his room. He silently closed the door. “Where were we?” he asked “Hmm….let me refresh your memory.” I said. He picked me up and I hung on to his neck kissing him rough and passionately melting at the thought of his very touch. We kept crashing into random objects so he decided to set me down. Before I could control myself, I found my mischievous hands undo his belt and then his shirt. He was muscular, his stomach lined with thinner muscles and his arms were strong.

He pulled me close and started a whole fresh round of kisses. Goose bumps ran down my spine as I felt Peter unbuttoning my dress- revealing my white undergarment. The dress compiled on the floor. I could actually breathe now because my undergarment was loose-fitted.

Peter gazed into my eyes and broke the silence by softly saying “Lizbeth, I love you.” I knew I loved him back but just telling it would just allow him to break my heart and leave me. I put a finger to his lips to silence him. He picked me up and dropped me gently onto the bed and under the plush covers and lay next to me. He kissed my cheek and rolled onto his side. I crept up closer resting my chin on his shoulders and wrapped my arms around his muscular torso. We then fell into a fitful sleep.

I woke up hours later pressed against Peter; planning to get my dress back on and creep back into my bedroom. When I made the slightest movement, Peter stirred and rolled over on his other side. I paused for a moment and silently crept over to my dress. I put it over my head and walked into the hallway. I stealthily closed the mahogany door behind me and checked to see if anyone was wandering about the castle. Before I reached the bottom of the stairs; a centaur patrolling the hall walked by. I slipped on the staircase and let out a little grunt. The centaur cautiously searched the perimeter and continued on his patrol. Letting out a small breath of relief, I ran to my bedroom in the servant’s quarters. I closed the door behind me quietly so I wouldn’t wake Gena who was sleeping peacefully. As I walked to by bed, I stubbed my toe on the nightstand between our beds. I clutched my pinky toe in pain, not daring to yelp out of affliction. I finally got into my bed and pulled the covers onto me.



Edité par will4ever le 12/06/2006 à 00:26

i love ur wording to the story!
do u know what i mean?
i mean u're using strong words.
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a thumbs-up for this one(the one u jst posted)

THAT was the best update yet!! It shows that they are not perfect. ya know what i mean? It puts a nice twist to the story!
and yes thank youfor warning the yonger ones! no offence to them or anything! that really wa sgreat!

aww thnx ash- and this chap goes out to yo cuz u have been encouraging me to keep updating this one! lol



Elizabeth:

I woke up a few hours later feeling refreshed. The sweet memories of last night replayed in my mind. I got of bed and found Gena reading a book quietly in bed. She was startled to find me awake.

“Good morning, sleeping beauty.” Gena said pleased to see me finally up.

“Good morning to you too.” I said enthused and motivated.

Gena and I walked over to our armoire and put on our monotonous tan servant uniforms. We silently walked over to the Dining Hall to assist in serving breakfast to the Narnian rulers and vile Victoria. I again served the beverage, only this time it was fresh milk. I willingly filled their glasses up to the edge. I vanished to the back of the room to socialize with Gena as we watched them eat the hearty breakfast before them.

“Liz, did you realize that Victoria shall accompany us at the practice fields??”

“Um…..sure….. HEY, WAIT!!!! That beastly girl is coming with us?”

“Yeah, your sweetheart invited her to come with us to the practice fields! I can’t believe it.”

“She is out to get me, Gena. She can’t come!!! Ugh!” I moaned while wondering why my dear Peter would invite her.

The bell suddenly rung to signal that breakfast was done. Peter looked my way and mouthed ‘my room’ as he walked down the hallway. I nodded in reply and went to clean the table. I climbed up the stairs and arrived in front of the familiar mahogany door.

I knocked and said in the gruffest voice I could pull off “Room service.”

“Oh, really!! I didn’t order any but by all means, come in anyway.” Peter said through the door jokingly.

I could hear the steady footsteps of Peter as he came and opened the door. He smiled a glamorous smile and picked me up by my waist, covering me with little kisses. “Before we set out for the practice fields, I wanted to give you a little surprise or two.”
He walked over to his armoire and pulled out an elongated object draped with red silk. I withdrew the silk to reveal a double-edged sword encrusted with rubies and diamonds. I was absolutely awe struck. Before I could physically say anything, Peter pulled out a parcel wrapped with a gold ribbon. I opened the parcel up and saw a ring with an emerald in the center of a gold band.

“It is a promise ring. I have made a promise to myself to love you and protect you always.” Peter said softly.

“Thank-you Peter!!!! You are far too generous. Both gifts are flawless and I shall treasure them always.” I said in the same tone of voice that Peter did. He walked over to me and picked me up by the waist and twirled me around. I screamed and laughed in delight. I clung on to his neck and he leaned in and kissed me slowly and sweetly. Before we finished our enchanting kiss, we heard a knock on the door and Lucy walked in- with her eyes covered behind her hand.

“Whoa guys, could you take your business somewhere else?? You guys definitely passed the line of my too much info!!!! UGH, save me the trouble!!!!” Lucy said sheepishly.

“First of all Lucy, we are somewhere else- YOU disrupted us. Second, what were you going to tell us??” Peter said boldly.

“Ummm………Oh yeah! Everyone is in the Great Hall waiting to go to the practice fields.” Lucy said back on track.

“Okay, Lucy. We shall be down in a moment. Be patient.” Peter said. And with that, Lucy left the room to its unknown business. I put the sword Peter gave me in a sheath tied to my apron belt. Peter grabbed the weaponry that he needed. I took his arm and he escorted me down to the Great Hall. Lucy, Susan, Edmund and Gena were all standing in the Hall finally relieved that we were ready.

Peter:

I escorted my sweet Lizbeth down to the Great Hall. To our advantage, everyone was there and was relieved to actually see us emerge. Victoria was wearing a navy blue velvet dress that made her eyes stand out beautifully and her hair was loose and straight. She too had a form of weaponry to use on the practice fields with her on a sheath. I smiled friendly to everyone but Victoria revealed a dazzling smile herself, but not as great as Elizabeth’s.

Victoria:

I was pleased to see Peter emerge from the staircase. When I saw that servant girl all over Peter, Ugh! Anger bubbled inside of me- my inner flame ablaze. I just melted at that smile though. I was shocked to feel myself smile back in response- but anyone smart enough would know that it was a grimace masked.

The entire trip down to the practice field was full of silence; enjoying the surroundings about us. That twit if a servant girl was still hanging onto his arm. I had to take action and I knew exactly what to do- I smiled inside of myself at my glorious plan and knew it was the perfect solution to all of my problems.

WOAH! yeah seriously i love this story!
i really want to know what happens next! i hate that vostoria person. can you pm me what is gonna happen? i am kidding i dont want to know but yeah this story rocks., you need to publish it!

i wish i could but i couldnt cuz its a narnia-based kinda story and plus its kinda like someone else's idea...i said it in the 1st post

i know im not sure if i wanna post the rest of mine because im lookin to get it published and i cant publish it if someone already stole it!

yeah...but i would like to get a story published!!!

so would i cuz all it takes is a lot of time, a thesaurus, a dictionary, and a story line to get quite a lot of money, assuming it sells. plus you getta entertain a bunch of peeps!