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okay so im writing a new story and im hoping this one is better than the last one, it is completely different and im still going to cotninue with the other story... tell me if you like it, oh and when a paragraph is in italics means that that is what the character is thinking in that moment

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CHAPTER 1

“Miss Evans, there is still one more minute before my class is over and you go to your summer vacations, so could you please pay attention to this poem” the teacher said after seeing that Victoria was quite distracted looking out of the window. “hmm... yeah sure” Victoria replied after Lauren hitted the top of her desk.

Victoria is seventeen year old teenager, has a long light brown hair, although if she is under the sun it shows some natural blonde highlights, she has brown eyes and tanned skin, she is skinny and she isn’t that tall she just reaches 5’5”.

One more minute before I’m out of here, just one more minute and ill have two months of freedom, gosh this is the longest minute of my life, when will this teacher stop talking.

Suddenly the bell rang and Victoria was the first one to go out of the classroom, Lauren her best friend walked behind her and then said, “We are free”, Victoria laughed, “I know, I couldn’t wait until she stopped talking”…the two girls walked outside of school talking about what they were going to do all summer, “Hey my sister just bought a movie and she has seen it like a thousand times, so I guess its good, we could see it tonight” Lauren said as she sitted down next to Victoria, “Which movie, because last time your sister bought a movie and we saw it I couldn’t sleep for a week, I swear ill never see a horror movie again” Victoria said as she felt how her arm had filled with goosebumps just because she remembered the movie …Lauren laughed and said, “its called Chronicles of Narnia…and don’t worry I won’t see one of those movies ever”…”Is that the movie that is in all of the cereal boxes and not to mention it has a poster announcing the release of its DVD in every single store we go in”…Lauren laughed and said, “Yeah that’s it”. Just then Victoria saw her mom park in front of the bench in the one they were sitting.

Victoria immediately stood up and said, “Finally”, Lauren laughed and said, “I’ll call you at 6”, Just then Victoria’s sister, Rebecca an 11 year old who has a short black hair ran past her and said, “I take the front seat”. “Fine” Victoria said as she opened the sliding door of her mom’s van. She sat down and next to her other sister called Stephanie; she is a five year old with dark brown hair and hazel eyes.

“Mom, this is going to be the best summer ever!” Victoria said with a huge smile on her face, her mom looked at her and said, “I know, isn’t it exciting that we are spending the whole summer vacations at the beach”…”what?!?” Victoria said, “No, I wanted to spend my vacations here…you have to be kidding, im not spending the whole summer around the old people from the condominiums”…”They aren’t old” her mom said, “and besides you know that your father likes to spend time with his friends”. Victoria sighted and said, “Well at least can you tell me when we are leaving?”… “Tomorrow morning and you need to pack tonight so you are not going out today and besides Phoebe is coming with us”. Victoria smiled “well at least ill have someone to spend time with” she said.

Phoebe is Victoria’s cousin, she is slightly shorter than her, she has long wavy dark brown-reddish hair, she is also skinny and she is Victoria’s same age, they used to go to the same school but she had to go to another one since her father got a new job and they moved into a new house.

When Victoria got home she went to her room and called Lauren, the phone ringed two times before she picked it up and Victoria told her the bad news. “What, not again!?!” Lauren said, “You always spend your vacations there”… “I know but hey it’s not my fault that my family owns one of those condominiums, and besides we just go there because my dad wants to relax from all the work he ahs been having”.

Victoria’s dad is a doctor, he and his friend, Dr. Stevens, decided to buy two condominiums in one of the buildings in Hawaii ten years ago, one for each family, and since then they spend all of the summer vacations there.

“Well at least look at the bright side” Lauren said, “girl, listen to me, this doesn’t have a bright side, I wont be here the whole summer”…”Yeah but at least you get to spend some time with Taylor” she said laughing.

Taylor was Dr. Steven’s son he is 21 years old, he is tall has brown hair with some natural light brown highlights, his eyes are blue almost gray, and he has a nice and musculous body, Victoria has known him since they were really young, and since he is an only child and his mom always wanted a daughter he treats Victoria as if she was her daughter. Taylor has always been one of Victoria’s best friends, he loves making pranks on her but at the same time he is kind of overprotective.

“Taylor’s only purpose in life is making me mad” Victoria said as she remembered all of the pranks he had done to her in the vacations two years before, since luckily he was punished last year and couldn’t go to Hawaii.

“Well I have to go pack my things, Phoebe is getting here in a couple of hours” Victoria said and then hung up the phone. She then went to her closet and opened it, she looked at all her clothes and basically packed most of them since she was spending the next two months over there. After a few hours of packing she was finally done, she went downstairs and found Phoebe there, they spent the next couple of hours talking about what had been going on with their lives these past months they hadn’t seen each other. Then Phoebe said, “I can’t wait till I see Sam again”…Victoria looked at her and said, “Who is Sam?”…Phoebe blushed and then said, okay so remember that I just went to Hawaii a couple of weeks ago with my family” Victoria nodded and then Phoebe continued, “Well I met this guy who is totally handsome and he is super sweet, he lives there just a couple of blocks away from the condominiums”.

Phoebe’s family also had a condominium in the building; it was like each member of the family had a condominium there, luckily enough their parents had allowed them to stay in Phoebe’s apartment, and Victoria’s parents and sisters would stay in their own.

They spent the whole night talking about Sam and about how much fun they were going to have, after all they had a whole apartment for themselves, and Victoria’s parents were 5 floors beneath them. They had a hard time to go to sleep but they finally managed to do so, the next morning Victoria’s mom woke them up and they took a shower and went to the airport.
Votre texte Edité par Annie1290 le 15/05/2006 à 22:23
Edité par Annie1290 le 15/05/2006 à 22:25

okay those are the guys i have in mind..adam wont appear in the story until later on.. but:

ian somerhalder - Taylor Stevens
tom welling - Sam Cosgrove
Edité par Annie1290 le 15/05/2006 à 22:21

i love the story !!!

plz update soon i cant wait (-D

and the guys are total hotties %-D

”…”Is that the movie that is in all of the cereal boxes and not to mention it has a poster announcing the release of its DVD in every single store we go in”…

^^ funny but dont be hatin'....LOL

aww i hope she has fun anyway in Hawaii

those guys= total hotties

hey please read it and thell em what you think...please...

I LOVE IT! :-D

i like it - i would hate to do the smae thing every summer! o well its in hawaii so i'd probably surf the whole time . . . i wish i lived by a beach, but i don't

i am going to give you an honest opinion because i know thats what i would want.....

some of your english isn't correct but your story line is great!

i know some of my english isnt correct, because im not a anative speaker and i did that story while doing my history homework so its kind of hard to to be writing a summary in spanish and a story in english at the same..time but thanks for the comment though

oh sorry if i hurt your feelings i didnt know english wasnt your first language

oh no you didnt bacause i ahd already seen some spelling mistakes in it, but i idnt took time to correct it all..haha but yeah its not my first language

i just read through the mistakes - did u konw taht as lnog as the nmebur of letrts are ccrerot and the 1st and lsat lrttes are in the rghit sopt of a wrod you can siltl raed it b/c ur mnid dsoen't colmtelpey raed it anawys (-D

I dunno the taylor guy looks kinda mean but the other too are HOT!!!

yah great storie!

Oh yeah that too!!!!

man im BORED!!!!!!!
Edité par cheeky_monkey01 le 16/05/2006 à 17:54

Hey, im writing an essay for my english teacher and its not even hw or nefing to do with wat we r doing!!!

UPDATE (-D

CHAPTER 2
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When they got there Phoebe and Victoria went to some magazine stands and bought every teen magazine there and some bubblegum and chocolates too then went back to the gate to board their airplane. They had to make a huge line to board the plan, after about 45 minutes of standing up they finally got to the front of the line, the lady got their tickets and said, “Thank you, we hope you enjoy the flight” Victoria smiled an boarded the plane, “14 C” Victoria said, “oh, over there” Phoebe pointed, both of the girl sat down and they each took a magazine and started reading it, both of the girls fell asleep and the next thing they knew was that they were about to land in Hawaii, Victoria took out a piece of bubblegum, she hated when her ears hurt because of the landing, they buckled their seatbelts and after a few minutes they had already landed, they walked through the plane’s hallway and then all the way over to another one that took them directly to where the suitcases were. “I hate landing”; Phoebe said as she grabbed her suitcase, Victoria laughed and said, “yeah well, I wouldn’t really like staying in the plane the whole time” both of them walked to where the rest of the family was and then Victoria’s dad said, “well lets go rent the car that we will be using”. The whole family went to a little office that was just a couple of feet away from where they were and after a couple of minutes they were already heading out of the airport and to the condominiums. When they got there Phoebe and Victoria went to their apartment which was in the seventh floor, just besides Taylor’s family apartment, Victoria’s parents were in the second floor.

When Phoebe opened the door to the apartment they immediately smelled the vanilla deodorizers Phoebe had placed all over the apartment the last time she came. “Phoebe, dude, you have an obsession with vanilla, get over it” Victoria said Phoebe laughed and said, “hey either you smell vanilla or humidity you choose”…Victoria laughed, “I think I rather smell vanilla”…Phoebe then went to the kitchen and said, “we need to go to the supermarket we don’t have any food and im starving”…Victoria laughed and said, “The only thing you can think about is food right?”…Phoebe laughed and said “well yeah actually, that’s all I can think of when I haven’t had a proper meal all day long and it’s already six o’ clock”…Victoria and Phoebe then went to her parent’s apartment and asked them for some money and maybe if they were lucky they could also lend them the car.

“Mom, we are going to the supermarket can you give us some money”, Her mom laughed and said, “John can you give the girls some money?”, her dad came and said, “okay fine” and took out his wallet and gave her some cash, did you brought your license?” he asked Victoria, “yeah I always have it with me” Victoria said...Phoebe smiled and then looked at Victoria who had a huge smile on her face, “Okay then you can take the car, just be careful”…”Oh I will, I promise”…both of them walked out of the apartment and took the elevator to the parking lot, they got in the car and went to the supermarket that was only a couple of blocks away, they practically bought everything they saw there, it took them almost an hour an a half to finish shopping for all the groceries and then they went back to their apartment.
They got to their apartment at eight and cooked some Mac’ and Cheese, and then they continued putting away the rest of the groceries, just after that they unpacked all of their clothes and got them in all of the drawers and in the closet. “I’m so tired” Victoria said, Phoebe laughed and said, “yeah I know, me too, we should probably go to sleep right now and then go to the beach tomorrow” both of the girls got in their pajamas and just before she went to her room she heard a knock on the door, she opened it and saw Rebecca…”What do you want?” she said, “Mom says that you should go say hi, to the Stevens”…Victoria took a deep breath and said, “Could you tell her that im already in my pajamas and that I am going to sleep and that I will do that tomorrow”… “as you wish your highness” she said in a sarcastic voice. Victoria closed the door and then went to her room, the next morning Phoebe woke her up and said, “lets go for a walk to the beach”…Victoria barely opened her eyes and said, “You are like a little kid in Christmas, we are going to be here for 2 months and I promise you the beach will be here all the time, what’s the hurry”…Phoebe took a deep breath and said “oh come on lets go” and practically pulled Victoria out of bed, Victoria got into her black and pink bikini and then she got her black skirt and pink flip-flops. Phoebe was already ready so they both went downstairs and headed of to the beach, the condominiums were practically in a corner of the island they had the beach to one side of them and behind the condominiums was a dock were the people had all of their boats and jet skies.

The two girls went to the beach and walked for about an hour, “Okay im tired, lets go back” Victoria said, Phoebe didn’t answer she was too busy looking for someone, “Hey, you are looking for Sam right?” Victoria said, Phoebe just nodded and said, “lets just walk a little bit more I promise that if I don’t see him in 5 more minutes we can go back” Victoria took a deep breath and said, “Okay”…the girls kept walking for a little bit more when a guy came and covered Phoebe’s eyes, “Sam” Phoebe said with an excited voice. The guy then uncovered Phoebe’s eyes and hugged, “Victoria this is Sam”, Phoebe said with a huge smile on her face, “Sam, this is Victoria she is my cousin”, Victoria smiled at Sam, and then she just stood there hearing how Phoebe and Sam talked about what had they done the past month, then Sam said, “Hey would you like to come to the surf shop I just need to go pick up my cell phone I left it there”… Victoria smiled as she heard Phoebe said, “Sure, hey you didn’t told me you still worked there”, Sam laughed and answered…”yeah I still work there”, the three of them walked towards the surf shop that wasn’t far away, Victoria walked next to Phoebe who was holding hands with Sam and kept talking and kind of left Victoria out of the conversation. “Hey Victoria, I can call one of my friends if you wish, in fact I have a friend at the surf shop, I think that you two could make a nice couple”, Victoria smiled at Sam and said, “oh no, that’s okay”…then Phoebe said, “oh come on Victoria, we could go on double dates”, Victoria looked at Phoebe and said, “Phoebe, I think I can get guys on my own, and besides its not like if I needed to date someone to have fun”, Sam laughed at what Victoria said and then continued talking to Phoebe. They finally got to the surf shop and they went inside.

“Hey Jonathan, this is Phoebe I bet you remember her and this is Victoria her cousin” Sam said, Victoria smiled and said, “Im going to get something to drink” and went to the soda machine that was outside, she bought a sprite and sat down at a bench. She then saw a red jeep park just in front of her and a guy who she immediately recognized as Taylor got out of it.

“Hey what are you doing here?” he asked as he sat down next to Victoria, “Phoebe is inside with her boyfriend, and I was bored so I decided to come outside and sit down”. Taylor nodded and then the two of the kept talking.

“I thought your cousin said that she didn’t need a guy to have fun” Sam said as he pointed to Victoria and Taylor, who were talking outside, Phoebe laughed and said, “I think he is Taylor, I have never met him but he fits the description and the photograph that Victoria showed me the other day, they are friends since they were little kids”.

“Im so bored” Victoria said after she saw that Sam and Phoebe were still inside talking. “I can give you a ride to your apartment” Taylor said, Victoria laughed and said, “Thank you just let me tell Phoebe that im going back” …She then went inside of the store and said, “Phoebe im going back, Taylor is giving me a ride home, are you coming?” Phoebe shook her head and said, “No we are going to get some ice cream we will be back later”, Victoria nodded and went out of the store. “You see, I told you he is Taylor I never forget a face” Phoebe said as she saw Victoria get on the red jeep.
Edité par Annie1290 le 17/05/2006 à 00:44
Edité par Annie1290 le 17/05/2006 à 00:44

o annie its good - keep going